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Erase Time for Me

You provide the only taste of love I shall ever know.
Making me go soft, reminding me of my femininity.

Sweetheart, time has dulled me inside and out.
But your words rebel against Time’s work.

You erase his lines, his dullness,
And polish me with your tenderness.

You make me shine outside and inside.
Dear Love, erase time for me.

Welcome to my heart.
©2007-2009 ~Spriglief
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Co-authored with Mala

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:iconweitmare:
aww.. this is so sweet.. gave me goosebumps :D I love this, great emotion! :heart:

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Vegetarians taste better!

"Nothing is less real than realism. Details are confusing. It is only by selection, by elimination, by emphasis that we get at the real meaning of things." -Georgia O'Keeffe
:iconblackdove42:
This is beautiful. It reminds me of the love my parents have for each other, an affection that has been cultured throughout the 30 years of their marriage. I like how there are clearly two speakers in this poem. I can't think of a single thing to change here.

I don't know if this is an appropriate question, but I'd love to know more about what inspired this poem. While it's concise, the poem conveys so much and I feel as though I've only scratched surface.

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If holidays were twelve months long
And life were games and fun
And all the skies
Were filled with PSI's
...Would thinking still get done?


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:iconjeannie64:
oh wow ! great stuff id like to get to know mala too xxxxxxxxxxxxj

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life is like a bowl of jelly it takes very little to upset the balance

lifes a bitch but only if you let it be so
:iconhum-i:
lovely :)

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She does not use DA.
:iconjeannie64:
ah im sorry to hear that dear , but at least she loves your work also . that means shes a clever person as you are such a clever artist your actually one of my all time favs if it be said xxj:):hu::)

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life is like a bowl of jelly it takes very little to upset the balance

lifes a bitch but only if you let it be so
:iconspriglief:
Why thank you Jen. I also admire you, not only your poetry, but how you seem to enjoy your poetry. I conscious try to capture that for myself as I read your stuff as I am sure it will make me a better writer.

Tonight I am going to read "The Named Fear" at the college. It seems the admin. has broken up the Frat. House inbreeding that controled the Atlantas Mag. last year. I now have a chance that I might get something published this year. I hope you don't mind me sharing my excitement with a fellow poet.
:iconjeannie64:
oh my never been complimemted like that about my writing hon gosh :blushes:xxJ
oh im thrilled that you may get some work published honey and glad you feel confident and trusting enough to share your excitemennt with little old me xxj :):hug:

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life is like a bowl of jelly it takes very little to upset the balance

lifes a bitch but only if you let it be so
:iconspriglief:
Three people came up and said they liked my poem and delivery. Also, I found an visual artist that might make something from my "Allah's Tears" poem. It was a very successful night and time will tell if anything comes of it.

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